- Okay I think that's good enough, Command: check the damage
A' L L U K I N - chapter 2
Re: A' L L U K I N - chapter 2
Theta
Re: A' L L U K I N - chapter 2
- Okay I think that's good enough, Command: check the damage
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<DOCTOR DODD>
Oh now look what you have done!
You have set into motion that undid everything for all of us!!!
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<ENER>
YAAHHH!!!
<MADDOX>
WHAT THE FUCKING HELL?!?! How can you survive even that?!?!
<DOCTOR DODD>
That's where you're wrong.
Sooner or later, you will realize the significance of your ignorance.
For I will be ashes soon...
Re: A' L L U K I N - chapter 2
Theta
- COMMAND: Wait for him to burn up and see if any cards or something survived
Re: A' L L U K I N - chapter 2
- COMMAND: Wait for him to burn up and see if any cards or something survived
Oh... finally. We did it, then.
<DOCTOR DODD>
Don't be so conceit, Maddox. You think you seen it all?
<ENER>
As if there are anything better than you are!
<MADDOX>
Or... worst?
<DOCTOR DODD>
You cannot hope to survive that are yet to be encountered out there. If you think I am the worst, you are extremely far away from the accuracy of that assumption. Without any threads of understanding what's happening to you two and to all of us, there is no way we can resist the abstraction of fate.
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<DOCTOR DODD>
You.
Cannot.
Stop.
EVERYTHING.
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... what dangers lurk ahead?
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Re: A' L L U K I N - chapter 2
( ak + soulllock )
- now that was epic
I have to thank you all for your persistence with excellent commands. Now that you know the severity of Situation... what will lurks within the next chapter?
Until next time... peace.
- HECK YEAH WE BEAT THE FIRST BOSS WOOO
- More like a mini boss
ok, maybe the first boss is an accurate description.
- simply A-MA-ZING! This little story at the end is so...mysterious...
Doctor Dodd idea was very cool!!
Now we can wait peacefully to chapter 3.
But I wonder if we can still save Elouf...let's wait for the next chapter to see it.
- I wonder how they're even gonna get out of the room o.o But yeah, AK, awesome work dude.
- thanks guys
Chapter 3 will be coming out sometime soon. No, not on Monday. That would be too quick. Perhaps sometime this week.
I will post the link to Chapter 3 here when it ready
- You know ak, the flame images were quite awesome.
Also, THEORY:
After the first and second chapter, we've seen two guys talking.
They were talking also about experiments.
I think those guys are Ener and Maddox, before the company started experimenting on them.
so here's the story:
there was once the Company
it made things like Quall, Elouf, Ener
they experimented on them
something bad happened
and they woke up.
lol. theories.
- yeah...I do think the two beings are Ener an Maddox....but only this.
- Though my fried router kept me out of this adventure as of late, I have taken moments here and there to read, and I like it so far. The art is nice, especially considering you pump these things out so quickly and efficiently. My only complaints are; 1. The English falters in some areas. It is probably not your first language, so I can't blame you, but it can get a little distracting at times, and 2. The characters' reactions can seem a little off at times. The cute appeal comes through loud and clear, but that can't really be prevalent in darker scenes, like Doctor Dodds operation room. Personally, I think the average person's reaction to having the lights come on would be to curse up a storm and lose my lunch.
That doesn't mean I didn't like it though. It's definitely one of the more entertaining ones I've read in my time, and as a browser of the MSPA adventure subforum, that's saying something.
English isn't exactly my strong language, though I try to make it clear and error-free as possibleThe English falters in some areas. It is probably not your first language, so I can't blame you, but it can get a little distracting at times
I try to make them as natural and smoothly-flowing as possible. I do notice some "off-of-rhythm" flows in some of reactions and dialogues. The only reactions that are intentionally "off" are (surprises) humor bits and skitsThe characters' reactions can seem a little off at times.
The cuteness isn't all appearance. It also about how the character actsThe cute appeal comes through loud and clear, but that can't really be prevalent in darker scenes, like Doctor Dodds operation room. Personally, I think the average person's reaction to having the lights come on would be to curse up a storm and lose my lunch.When cute characters act seriously, then then tone is more serious than cute. At least, that's my opinions. And personally, I would make a run for it rather than stand still, cuss out loud, and get yourself kill in split second. Of course, Doctor Dodd isn't the type to quick-kill someone.
ThanksThat doesn't mean I didn't like it though. It's definitely one of the more entertaining ones I've read in my time, and as a browser of the MSPA adventure subforum, that's saying something.it may not suppose to overtake MSPA as epic "forum story" of the internet, but I like knowing that awesome readers like you enjoyed its substances
well, at least I hope it has substances.
I prepared about at least 50% of artworks before I start a chapter, mainly the environments and few of characters' sets of poses. That's one of reasons why I am pumping them out so fastThe art is nice, especially considering you pump these things out so quickly and efficiently.of course, that doesn't count for many of drama, plot, and humor scenes which takes some time to develop (biggest example would be the epic Doctor Dodd sequence)
Remember, sometimes AK can only work with the COMMANDS he gets lol .. >_>The characters' reactions can seem a little off at times.
Personally, I love the contrast between a chibi-furry duo and a full of blood and guts. But in the story/world "realism" is subjective.. I mean whats the extent of being "awakened" and all sorts of excuses are possible lol.The cute appeal comes through loud and clear, but that can't really be prevalent in darker scenes, like Doctor Dodds operation room. Personally, I think the average person's reaction to having the lights come on would be to curse up a storm and lose my lunch.
Do you ever prepare some dialoque/poses that you don't actually get used? Like you anticipate a command that just doesn't come up by chance? It'd be interesting if you included those in the post-chapter sketches section. One I can think of is maybe.. Maddox testing out the lighter+welder and the spray paint can, prior to the Doctor Dodd scene? The only possible thing I might bring up, which you may have already come up with, is to avoid being the first post on the page? So people can back track to the last page they saw, if they missed some, so they don't get spoilers right in their face D: I got Doctor Dodds lab reveal too early that way, but still got the "HOOOOOOOOLY CRAP" factor lolI prepared about at least 50% of artworks before I start a chapter, mainly the environments and few of characters' sets of poses. That's one of reasons why I am pumping them out so fast [:D] of course, that doesn't count for many of drama, plot, and humor scenes which takes some time to develop (biggest example would be the epic Doctor Dodd sequence)
And whoops. I thought this was the discussion thread ._.
- You can move to the discussion thread now
I will post the link to the 3rd Chapter when it ready.
minor discussions are still accepted here
- WOOOOOOAH!!!! Kinda glad I didn't participate so I get more of the Comic-Book feel to it.
Amazing as always!
I usually get spoilers from starting on the backpage too, but -ak-'s just that good of a storyteller.I got Doctor Dodds lab reveal too early that way, but still got the "HOOOOOOOOLY CRAP" factor lol
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Unbreakable_(film)Command: Ask how he is invincible like Bruce Willis in the movie Invincible
This one, Theta?
like the LADDER sequence??? HUN hun???That's one of reasons why I am pumping them out so fast of course, that doesn't count for many of drama, plot, and humor scenes which takes some time to develop
And this story took a lot of months of polishesI usually get spoilers from starting on the backpage too, but -ak-'s just that good of a storyteller.
That one took a while to makelike the LADDER sequence??? HUN hun???I just couldn't say NO to that one
I knew you would like it! and I loved what happened to the LADDER / rocket ladderI just couldn't say NO to that one
- Heh. Well, thanks for the participation, guys and gals
sad to say that this thread will be closed...
for the next chapter is out!
-- CHAPTER 3 - in blind excursion --
enjoy